NaPoWriMo #9

Prompt: Noir

(did a little bit of reworking on an old piece)

 

Fade To Black

 

Scene: exterior night, winter

Shimmered frost topped snow suppresses street, 

air crisp, clean

Footsteps crunch toward lone taxi.

Cut to taxi interior

Joe, hat pulled low

Misty jet breath fogs window

Waiting on a fare, just waiting.

Exterior: scuffed white knuckles

rap sheet thin glass,

window begrudgingly open

Mana from heaven

Money changing hands

Coins fall and fill cupped palms

Joe: “What’s this money fer Mr?”

High wind catches collar

and words with it

“Cab fare to nowhere,

You’re saving me son”

Joe, hat pulled low,

watches retreat

lined through rear window heat,

Stagger and step and 

Fade Out.

 

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6 thoughts on “NaPoWriMo #9

  1. KonciouSLea April 9, 2013 / 5:33 pm

    Love your alliteration with this piece.

    • aislingdoherty April 9, 2013 / 5:41 pm

      Thank you!!

      • KonciouSLea April 9, 2013 / 5:46 pm

        You’re welcome. I like alliteration. I think it adds so much to the work. Shows you put a lot of effort into it.

  2. poyye April 13, 2013 / 12:16 am

    Hi, you subscribed to me at my old post address. The new one for my experiments in poetry is: Poetry4one.wordpress.com/ I am very illiterate when it comes to computers and web sites and poetry is a new experiment but honestly I CAN read and loved your poem!

    • aislingdoherty April 13, 2013 / 12:32 am

      Aw thanks so much. It’s very sweet of you to say! I’ll subscribe to your new blog too, looking forward to reading some stuff! 🙂

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